I've been thinking about story endings
In an erotic story, the sex must be hinted at, then soon appear – rarely is there time for a long prelude…unless, perhaps, the implications build and build convincingly. How, then, to end the story? There should be some quality that somehow puts the sex into a different context: perhaps that there is a realization that something special has occurred; or that one partner has the advantage, but in the end the other is in control. Or simply a surprise twist that makes the story different from what it seemed. Here is one example.
THIS WEEK'S SHORT STORY
THE ROYAL ASTRONOMER'S VISIT
HUNTER BYRD © 2009
"A tiresome event," thought the Royal Astronomer. Too much food, too many speeches. He'd looked forward to meeting the young queen, whose interest in his work had led him to accept the invitation, but she'd left after a perfunctory toast. The king was slowly getting drunk, his full attention on the erotic tableaux performed by three unclothed dancers. The Astronomer's attention wandered there briefly, but was not captured. Bored as well with the silly chatter of minor courtiers, he made an excuse, and found his way to the apartments provided for his visit. He paused at the door, seeing a motion of curtains inside. "Rodney?"
"No sir." She was nude, wearing only the bright band of steel on her neck that marked her as a slave of the castle. "Your assistant became somewhat ill from the wine; possibly he isn't used to its potency. He's in the dormitory now, and should be fine in the morning. I'm here to assist your toilette....if you will allow it."
Without asking, she took his cape and hung it. He strode into the chamber, darkly shadowed with red and purple curtains against old cherry wood, and sat on the carved ebony chair. She approached, knelt, and began to remove his boots. "Do you have a name, slave?" he asked. Her eyes did not meet his. "I am called Marin, my lord. If you will stand, I will remove your clothing," she added. "Your bath was drawn as soon as I was told you'd left the great hall. It is very hot, and will need a few minutes to cool."